After
taking off my shoes, I step into the house, feeling the wooden floor beneath
me. I head towards the bedroom, door always open. The room is narrow, with
light olive painted walls.
The first thing I see is her jacket
draped over the back of a wooden chair, her bookbag leaned against it. They
invited my jacket to join them. My eyes wandered to the left, on top of a
drawer is a plastic children’s boombox that comes with two tiny microphones. In
her childhood, she used it to interview her family about mundane topics. She
pretended to be a reporter, sang karaoke, and made her own mixtape before the
record button broke. The boombox was accompanied by her three piles of clothes.
They were organized by shirts, pants and pajamas. I recognized most of them.
Above are two windows with white curtains, plants on the windowsills. On the
left is a glass computer desk, it played a stream as her keyboard changed
colors. Her headset laid on top, which she uses to call me everyday. Next to
her computer chair, is a bunk bed against the wall. I always stare at the
bottom bunk first, our bed. The same things always greet me: two pillows
fluffed, non-matching bedding folded, (four feet) teddy bear named Sunny,
Tigger (my favorite), Stanley the lion, and Fishie the fish. I rarely notice
the top bunk. She only sleeps in it when I’m not there.
Your descriptive essay conveys a comfortable dominant impression. It creates a relaxed mood to readers as you describe the various things you recognize in the room. Familiarity of the room is established with specific diction, the names of the stuff animals are listed. The room is described with calm diction, "door always open", "narrow", and "light olive painted walls". This helps contribute to the dominant impression as it creates a friendly setting.
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